alfa995's movie Reviews on Newgrounds

[Stamper has no hope in NG]

So true

When I first submitted an icon with that new size I didn't knew it would crop, it was hard at first to find the correct size so that it would crop correctly. I just hope the redesign will be good.
Now for the flash itself. Nothing espectacular, but the voices were pretty good, it was kind of funny, but most importantly, very true. The art and animation was okay, so 8/10 overall

PS: Is Newgrounds really going to be blue? I hope that was just a joke. When I think of "Newgrounds" I think of white, black and that awesome yellowish orange, not blue...

[Orange Adventure Xmas]

Great

The ending (after he died) wasn't really funny, but that's just me. Everything else was pretty good, a lot of FBF, you really put time and effort in this animation, good choice of music and awesome art.

5/5 and 9/10 (By the way, I recommended it for the Castle Crashers collection)

[W.I.W.N.W.A...? Taxes]

Mmmm okay...

I think everything that had to be said about this has already being said, but I will tell you what I think, and give you advice instead of just pointing out the flaws you already know.
First of all, there are some things that make a flash good: sound (music, sfx, voice), story, art (and the quality of animation) and comedy. Most flashes only need two or three of those to be good, so I´ll tell you what this animation has.

Sound: 1 point
Music...not very high quality, and most of the flash had no background music. If it had voice it would not be a problem, but instead of voice, you used mumbling sounds, and the sfx you used was kind of annoying (clicking sounds when people walk, for example). You even got Rina-chan to help you, but it didn´t make a difference, because there´s NO dialogue.

My advice: find some nice background music, there´s lots on Newgrounds you can use, and make sure the sfx is good (there are lots of free sound effects on findsounds and flashkit) and of course, next time write a script with words, not mumbling, if you´re going to ask a voice actor/actress to help you.

Story: 1 point
Since there was no voice, no word ballons, and the art was not good, I had to use my imagination to guess what the flash was about. Apparently, some guy moves out of his parents´ house, and lives his life normally, not worrying about well...taxes, right? If you´re going to talk about something, make sure you know what it is, you should have investigated what taxes are, and I think you already know that.

My advice: Make sure you investigate and understand the subject you´re animating about before starting to animate. If you have no voice, I don´t really recommend word ballons, but subtitles should be fine.

Art: 0 points
Sorry, but I can´t give the art of this flash anything higher than 0. The characters are stick figures, the backgrounds look like they were drawn in MS paint, and the motion is not fluid. Stick fights for example, can be good, even when the characters are so simple, bacause the motion is fluid, it has action, and most of the time the backgrounds are very well drawn. This has neither of those.

My advice: practice drawing in flash, don´t make the characters stick figures if you´re not going to animate them properly, take your time with the backgrounds, use shadows and highlights to give the drawings depth, read some flash tutorials, and use at least 18 FPS (frames per second) so it looks more fluid.

Comedy: 0 points
The genre of this is "Comedy-Original", but it didn´t even make me smile. To make something funny, it must have jokes (dialogue) or no voice, but a funny plot and good animation. I´m not sure what part of this was supposed to be funny, but to me, nothing was.

My advice: think of original jokes, or a funny story. But if you see something funny that is very popular and try to do the same, people are probably not going to like it, and remember, drawing badly on purpose doesn´t make a flash funny (I say that because some poeple think it does, draw badly on purpose, then find out nobody liked their flash).

Okay, that just my opinion. And about your comments, if you plan to continue the series, please improve everything. EVERYTHING. Graphics, animation, writing, music, comedy...and take your time, nobody is giving you a time limit. For this flash, I have to be honest, this is Newgrounds and it is 2010, so 2/10 and 1/5.

I hope you take my advices, I´m sure you will improve. Good luck with your future projects.

-alfa995

MFRS responds:

Well as i said in the last responses i'm still too bad in drawing, so i tried to use stick figures to give this animation a smoother look, which apparently didn't work. The mumbling was sort of a different idea i had, which didn't worked well too, so that is another thing that won't be in the next episode. About the sfx that is always a problem to find decent sfx sounds. Finally, about the comedy, i used some ideas i had while animating this video. Maybe some people think it's funny, but in overall most people didn't liked it as well. It will take a time for me to post anything new around here, because i still have a lot to improve. Thanks for your opinion :D

[Pokemon: Fated Encounter]

Okay, I´ll tell you this

It was not bad, I see you put effort in it, but there´s some things you should know. (Note, I´m a pokemon fan, have seen lots of fight flashes and I have made flash animations).

-- The camera moved too much. It was hard to see what was happening at some moments. Making the camera shake is good to add power to the attacks, but that doesn´t mean that you´re supposed to make it shake all the time. (-1 point)

-- The art was great, but only the pokemons. You should practice drawing people, all of the character´s faces look very similar, and not really good. Improve the drawings of people, or just don´t put them in your flash. Many pokemon battle animations can be good with only pokemon and no trainers. (-1 point)

-- No story. What was "Pokemon: fated battle"? two trainers having a pokemon 2 vs 2 battle, for fun? they were practicing for something? nobody knows. This is the second part, a new trainer appears with a Rayquaza and attacks them for no reason, another trainer appears from nowhere and helps them. How does the battle end? just like the first part, the battle is not over. (-1 point)

-- Too much energy beams. Using so many filters makes the animations lag (even in low quality) and increase the size of the file. Maybe you should try to compress the file, even if that costs image quality, and to add voice acting would improve your future animations. (-1 point)

Rating: 6/10, but it was not bad, so I also voted 5/5. I personally liked the first one more than this, but I think the third part will be much better. Good luck with your future animations.

Tyrant-D responds:

Yeah sweet review thanks man! I will note down your recommendations

[Mario vs Luigi test]

My opinion

It´s not really bad, but you should practice more before submitting the real flash. The sounds were okay, maybe use a different song and don´t forget to add a plot to the real flash.
Try to make the movement of the characters more fluid, and good luck with your future works. I´m sure you will improve.

[B]

It makes sense...

At first I was going to give this 0/10, but then I tought: "really, how did this didn´t get blammed?" So I investigated a little bit about this, about the origins of the Clock Crew, and understood what this is about.
B´s awesomeness isn´t the flash itself, it isn´t an animation, and it doesn´t have a deep meaning, normally something like this would get blammed very quickly (exactly what happened with "A"). Its awesomeness is how this passed judgement after being SO close to death, started the Clock Crew and made history in Newgrounds.
And to everyone else, please don´t submit things like this anymore...they would probably not pass judgement and if they did, you´re not going to get the attention this got, you would only lower the quality of the Portal. Newgrounds is a website for high quality animations, don´t make that change.

[Super Mario bros Z ep.8 (old series)]

Let me guess...

What will happen after that. Shadow will come from nowhere, maybe with a few Chaos Emeralds to kill Basilisx, and save everyone, or something like that.

I like this animation, the battles are excellent, they are not repetitive, and how you can select scenes is a great thing. Very good choice for music, I expect more animations from you.
Good job.

[Tarboy]

Lol

When Tarboy came out from the water and the smoking rijavascript:submission_controller.Ge tReviewController().GetWriteReviewWin dow().SetRating(8);ch guy ran away, there was a no smoking sign in the wall xD
Excellent animation.

[Mario vs. Sonic (First)]

Not too original

And too short, but it was not bad, you should keep practicing, Im sure you can do great fight animations.

Pattiasina24 responds:

I'm working on making animations longer. It's just lack of ideas. Thanks, I'm trying to get better! :D

[The Ultimate Showdown]

So many characters!

Lol, they were so many...Extreme smash bros xD
It was really funny, I like it a lot. 10/10