alfa995's movie Reviews on Newgrounds

[PokeMan : Revenge]

Not bad at all!

I like how you animated the battle fbf and you actually show the battle instead of just special effects and shaky camera movements. Good music choice too, it's always best to use music you make yourself or from the Audio Portal. The humor was good too, the ending was priceless.

The only thing is, as others have said, including yourself, is the voice acting. It's not as bad as you think though, maybe if you practiced more or got someone else to do the voice acting. Of course, that depends on you. I think if you're gonna keep making stuff like this, is best that you focus on animating, which is what you already do well instead of practicing voice acting and spending money on better quality recording instruments.

Still, it's up to you to decide what to do. Keep up the good work, I hope to see more from you in the future. It's 4/5 and 9/10 from me this time.

haitam responds:

Yeah ,I was thinking about getting somebody else to do the voice acting too next time.
Thanks for the review!

[Shrooms.]

Uhmm...

First of all, saying "try to enjoy" and "I'll be able to do quality animations soon" implies that you already know the flash is not good and you didn't put much effort into it. If you yourself think that, what do you think others would say about it?

Want advice? Work on a good script, solid jokes, spend time making good backgrounds, don't copy other people's styles (Cyanide and Happiness) or at least do that right, get a good quality microphone, and don't submit anything you're not proud of.

Hope you continue to practice, and I expect more from you in the future, but it's a 1/5 and 4/10 for me this time.

dereklarue responds:

Thanks for the review,

This is a practice animation to learn animation a bit better before jumping into more serious projects. Because this is not a "serious project", I didn't put in all the effort this animation most likely deserved.

Hmm, I hardly see how this follows the "Cyanide and Happiness" style, their bodies are more square for one. All I did was draw a few circles and lines. If I wanted to copy their "style", I wouldn't float around the boat, I'd use the good old fashion copy and paste technique.

Thanks for the advice! And thanks again for the honest review, any advice will not be discarded. :)

[CC- Red vs Orange]

Pretty nice

Good to see another E rated flash from you ;)

As of the animation itself, the fbf was great, it's a plus that you drew the characters with your own style instead of with Dan Paladin's, and the choice of music was good (I didn't even knew there was a full version of the Castle Crashers theme with better quality). The effects of fire and lightning were great too.

The only thing that bothers me are that it's WAY too short, so when it just started to get interesting it cuts, it was disappointing. Also, as others have mentioned, it's not the best idea to use the prefix "CC" for Castle Crashers, because most will think it means "Clock Crew". Well, I hope you keep making more stuff like this, 9/10 and 4/5 for you this time.

PS: The first time I played the game, I chose Red and my brother chose Orange (Soooo to me Red won in this flash xD)

Hulalaoo responds:

fuck off

[W.I.W.N.W.A...? Taxes]

Mmmm okay...

I think everything that had to be said about this has already being said, but I will tell you what I think, and give you advice instead of just pointing out the flaws you already know.
First of all, there are some things that make a flash good: sound (music, sfx, voice), story, art (and the quality of animation) and comedy. Most flashes only need two or three of those to be good, so I´ll tell you what this animation has.

Sound: 1 point
Music...not very high quality, and most of the flash had no background music. If it had voice it would not be a problem, but instead of voice, you used mumbling sounds, and the sfx you used was kind of annoying (clicking sounds when people walk, for example). You even got Rina-chan to help you, but it didn´t make a difference, because there´s NO dialogue.

My advice: find some nice background music, there´s lots on Newgrounds you can use, and make sure the sfx is good (there are lots of free sound effects on findsounds and flashkit) and of course, next time write a script with words, not mumbling, if you´re going to ask a voice actor/actress to help you.

Story: 1 point
Since there was no voice, no word ballons, and the art was not good, I had to use my imagination to guess what the flash was about. Apparently, some guy moves out of his parents´ house, and lives his life normally, not worrying about well...taxes, right? If you´re going to talk about something, make sure you know what it is, you should have investigated what taxes are, and I think you already know that.

My advice: Make sure you investigate and understand the subject you´re animating about before starting to animate. If you have no voice, I don´t really recommend word ballons, but subtitles should be fine.

Art: 0 points
Sorry, but I can´t give the art of this flash anything higher than 0. The characters are stick figures, the backgrounds look like they were drawn in MS paint, and the motion is not fluid. Stick fights for example, can be good, even when the characters are so simple, bacause the motion is fluid, it has action, and most of the time the backgrounds are very well drawn. This has neither of those.

My advice: practice drawing in flash, don´t make the characters stick figures if you´re not going to animate them properly, take your time with the backgrounds, use shadows and highlights to give the drawings depth, read some flash tutorials, and use at least 18 FPS (frames per second) so it looks more fluid.

Comedy: 0 points
The genre of this is "Comedy-Original", but it didn´t even make me smile. To make something funny, it must have jokes (dialogue) or no voice, but a funny plot and good animation. I´m not sure what part of this was supposed to be funny, but to me, nothing was.

My advice: think of original jokes, or a funny story. But if you see something funny that is very popular and try to do the same, people are probably not going to like it, and remember, drawing badly on purpose doesn´t make a flash funny (I say that because some poeple think it does, draw badly on purpose, then find out nobody liked their flash).

Okay, that just my opinion. And about your comments, if you plan to continue the series, please improve everything. EVERYTHING. Graphics, animation, writing, music, comedy...and take your time, nobody is giving you a time limit. For this flash, I have to be honest, this is Newgrounds and it is 2010, so 2/10 and 1/5.

I hope you take my advices, I´m sure you will improve. Good luck with your future projects.

-alfa995

MFRS responds:

Well as i said in the last responses i'm still too bad in drawing, so i tried to use stick figures to give this animation a smoother look, which apparently didn't work. The mumbling was sort of a different idea i had, which didn't worked well too, so that is another thing that won't be in the next episode. About the sfx that is always a problem to find decent sfx sounds. Finally, about the comedy, i used some ideas i had while animating this video. Maybe some people think it's funny, but in overall most people didn't liked it as well. It will take a time for me to post anything new around here, because i still have a lot to improve. Thanks for your opinion :D

[Pokemon: Fated Encounter]

Okay, I´ll tell you this

It was not bad, I see you put effort in it, but there´s some things you should know. (Note, I´m a pokemon fan, have seen lots of fight flashes and I have made flash animations).

-- The camera moved too much. It was hard to see what was happening at some moments. Making the camera shake is good to add power to the attacks, but that doesn´t mean that you´re supposed to make it shake all the time. (-1 point)

-- The art was great, but only the pokemons. You should practice drawing people, all of the character´s faces look very similar, and not really good. Improve the drawings of people, or just don´t put them in your flash. Many pokemon battle animations can be good with only pokemon and no trainers. (-1 point)

-- No story. What was "Pokemon: fated battle"? two trainers having a pokemon 2 vs 2 battle, for fun? they were practicing for something? nobody knows. This is the second part, a new trainer appears with a Rayquaza and attacks them for no reason, another trainer appears from nowhere and helps them. How does the battle end? just like the first part, the battle is not over. (-1 point)

-- Too much energy beams. Using so many filters makes the animations lag (even in low quality) and increase the size of the file. Maybe you should try to compress the file, even if that costs image quality, and to add voice acting would improve your future animations. (-1 point)

Rating: 6/10, but it was not bad, so I also voted 5/5. I personally liked the first one more than this, but I think the third part will be much better. Good luck with your future animations.

Tyrant-D responds:

Yeah sweet review thanks man! I will note down your recommendations

[Mario vs. Sonic (First)]

Not too original

And too short, but it was not bad, you should keep practicing, Im sure you can do great fight animations.

Pattiasina24 responds:

I'm working on making animations longer. It's just lack of ideas. Thanks, I'm trying to get better! :D